Photo: Laura Salas
Wake up your poetry brains with 15 Words or Less (guidelines are here)!
Three things this photo makes me think of:
- Macy’s Thanksgiving Day Parade
- Elmo escaping Sesame Street
- A kid in time-out having to watch a fun class party go on without him
And here’s my first draft–which did not come out very poemlike.
Elmo’s Lament
“Elmo–no sharp branches!”
He paid no attention,
until he got his punishment:
after-school descention.
–Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved
I’m in Boston at NCTE–and meeting up with some of my online friends today! I will read your poems, but I probably won’t be commenting. I hope you’ll play anyway:>) Have fun? and stick to? 15 WORDS OR LESS!??(Title doesn’t count toward word count:>)?
80 Responses
Woe is me
can’t get free
Stuck in a tree
for all to see
Maybe!
- Anne McKenna
I love how your poem rhymes! Simple but elegant- love the “maybe” at the end
This little rhyme is full of that stuck feeling.
I love the tone in this 🙂
I like the catchy rhythm of this — like a jump-rope chant.
The “Maybe” really sets it off.
Woe is me
can’t get free
Stuck in a tree
for all to see
Maybe!
- Anne McKenna
I love how your poem rhymes! Simple but elegant- love the “maybe” at the end
This little rhyme is full of that stuck feeling.
I love the tone in this 🙂
I like the catchy rhythm of this — like a jump-rope chant.
The “Maybe” really sets it off.
Helium lost
Squirrley friends found
Stuck on a branch
Far from the ground
HELP!
Your poem was so cute, Ms. Salas! Cool (and a little sad) picture!
Another cute one :0)
I like your use of the words “squirrely friends.” Clever.
Helium lost
Squirrley friends found
Stuck on a branch
Far from the ground
HELP!
Your poem was so cute, Ms. Salas! Cool (and a little sad) picture!
Another cute one :0)
I like your use of the words “squirrely friends.” Clever.
Helium lost, squirrley friends found…imaginations abound!
Helium lost, squirrley friends found…imaginations abound!
Here’s mine:
Partier’s long gone.
Confetti’s turning brown.
Look to the trees–
Elmo’s smile is upside down.
Cute Margaret. I suppose that’s Elmo’s version of “hanging from the chandelier, post-party.
Very cute!
Funny!
Here’s mine:
Partier’s long gone.
Confetti’s turning brown.
Look to the trees–
Elmo’s smile is upside down.
Cute Margaret. I suppose that’s Elmo’s version of “hanging from the chandelier, post-party.
Very cute!
Funny!
Flying trapeze with ease??
HA!
I’m on my knees
stuck in trees.
Help me,
PLEASE!
Nothing like hanging by the knees with no idea how to get down. Love the voice here.
Another amusing one. I like all those rhymes you used.
Flying trapeze with ease??
HA!
I’m on my knees
stuck in trees.
Help me,
PLEASE!
Nothing like hanging by the knees with no idea how to get down. Love the voice here.
Another amusing one. I like all those rhymes you used.
I love Elmo. Does anyone know how to compose a backward “R” on a keyboard? 😉 I’m sure there’s a way.
Red Flag Alert
Toys “R” Us holiday bag
snagged by a tree
sends morning warning
of hungry hawk!
Love morning warning and how this turns to nature.
Martha, this poem shows your sense of humor. I like that and I also like your internal rhyme.
I love Elmo. Does anyone know how to compose a backward “R” on a keyboard? 😉 I’m sure there’s a way.
Red Flag Alert
Toys “R” Us holiday bag
snagged by a tree
sends morning warning
of hungry hawk!
Love morning warning and how this turns to nature.
Martha, this poem shows your sense of humor. I like that and I also like your internal rhyme.
Love the pun, Laura! Hope to see you in Boston!
fall in the park…
the reappearance of
his lost balloon
Diane Mayr, all rights reserved.
Reappearance — wonderful.
Love the pun, Laura! Hope to see you in Boston!
fall in the park…
the reappearance of
his lost balloon
Diane Mayr, all rights reserved.
Reappearance — wonderful.
MAROONED BALLOON
Upside me,
stuck in tree.
Tangled, torn,
empty, worn.
What to do?
B‑r-e-a-t-h‑e t‑h-e v‑i-e‑w…
Andria W. Rosenbaum/ all rights reserved
Like the rhymes- and “upside me”
Love that last line!
I agree with the other comments. Nice rhymes and interesting “last line.”
MAROONED BALLOON
Upside me,
stuck in tree.
Tangled, torn,
empty, worn.
What to do?
B‑r-e-a-t-h‑e t‑h-e v‑i-e‑w…
Andria W. Rosenbaum/ all rights reserved
Like the rhymes- and “upside me”
Love that last line!
I agree with the other comments. Nice rhymes and interesting “last line.”
Kite flying
cut short -
caught in
clutching branches.
My first thought was of the time I lost a kite to a tree, and how forlorn it looked hanging up there until a storm brought it down.
Love the “clutching branches”!
You said a lot with very few words. Nice job.
Kite flying
cut short -
caught in
clutching branches.
My first thought was of the time I lost a kite to a tree, and how forlorn it looked hanging up there until a storm brought it down.
Love the “clutching branches”!
You said a lot with very few words. Nice job.
winter’s tree–
leafless branches harbor
balloons and sky
Harbor — I like this word here. And also that you added sky — stars by night too.
I love how you put the sky in the tree too, super!
Beautiful picture you painted with your words. Nice.
winter’s tree–
leafless branches harbor
balloons and sky
Harbor — I like this word here. And also that you added sky — stars by night too.
I love how you put the sky in the tree too, super!
Beautiful picture you painted with your words. Nice.
All I could think about was the aftermath of those storms.
Sorry.
After the Storm
Remnants of life
scattered and tossed,
forever lost except
a child’s toy dangles
from tree.
Powerfully poignant.
Very timely Patricia. Remnants of many lives. Martha
All I could think about was the aftermath of those storms.
Sorry.
After the Storm
Remnants of life
scattered and tossed,
forever lost except
a child’s toy dangles
from tree.
Powerfully poignant.
Very timely Patricia. Remnants of many lives. Martha
Wow, fab last line, Laura!
Will my loud annoying voice
carry me to safety
Help! Help!
Wow, fab last line, Laura!
Will my loud annoying voice
carry me to safety
Help! Help!
Police Blotter
A tragic, plastic demise
Pierced by the point
Of a naughty pine
Tree was apprehended
Cute and creative. What a fun image.
Hehehe–love that this is a police blotter entry!
Police Blotter
A tragic, plastic demise
Pierced by the point
Of a naughty pine
Tree was apprehended
Cute and creative. What a fun image.
Hehehe–love that this is a police blotter entry!
BIRTHDAY BALLOON BLUES (WISH UN-FILFILLED)
My balloon was found crumpled
In Mrs. Smith?s skeletal branches.
This year?s birthday wish ? punctured.
© Charles Waters 2013 all rights reserved.
BIRTHDAY BALLOON BLUES (WISH UN-FILFILLED)
My balloon was found crumpled
In Mrs. Smith?s skeletal branches.
This year?s birthday wish ? punctured.
© Charles Waters 2013 all rights reserved.