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Happy Thanksgiving! I was at NCTE last weekend, and I have so much to be grateful for about that. I’ll share some pics and stories next Friday!
Meanwhile, this month, we were writing poems in the style of Valerie Worth. I so enjoyed browsing through my volume of her collected small poems. I love how she uses near rhyme that sounds so natural. And how you can tell she’s observed and thought about her subject. And her conversational word choices. And of COURSE I love how short her poems are. They are tiny wonders.
I’m buried in hawk research and writing, so I wrote this poem after watching the old PBS Nature episode about Pale Male. One of the fledglings looked SO unstable making his first flight! I didn’t accomplish her conversational tone, but I did have fun writing this draft :>)
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Great metaphor — hunger with wings. Thank you, Laura
Yes! Rose took the words right out of my mouth. Hunger with wings is perfection.
Ooh, you nailed it — hunger with wings. And I love the imagery of the ship about to slip under — the wee ones are so raggedy with their first flights, and that truly captures it. You do animal poems so well we really missed you last Sunday! But, I’m glad you had NCTE time — looked like it was a lot of fun.
You definitely emulated Worth’s rhyme/near rhyme. And that ending. Here’s another round of applause for “hunger with wings.”
Laura, your last lines bring a spark to your poem about the mighty hawk. Now, I need to hone in on the rhyme/near rhyme that you deftly used.
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I think everyone must be mesmerized with your poem’s ending, Laura. That ‘hunger with wings’ is awesome. I recently read a child’s chapter book there the descriptions of the mice family’s education about hawks was scary. They would have liked your poem! : ) fiction meets real-life!
So much vivid imagery packed into so few lines…beautiful. I can’t say I’ve seen a fledging almost slipping under but now I really really want to!
I haven’t, either, Sara. I was watching an old PBS Nature episode of “Pale Male,” and video of one of the fledglings inspired this :>D
I was most struck by the closing use of metaphor in your poem, Laura- so apt. A most faithful rendition of Valerie Worth’s style. Hawk is another tiny wonder.
“hunger with wings” is perfect! I loved your pics of NCTE. What a great time.
Ohh, “hunger with wings” is amazing. Bravo! Nice job being inspired by Valerie Worth.
A powerful poem, Laura! Short and it has the feel of VW poetry, showing that you observed your subject closely, noting the details.
You nailed it, Laura!
Another cheer for “hunger with wings” so vivid an image and your entire poem akin to a young hawk, thanks Laura!
Gosh, those last two lines, Laura. PERFECTION. I just adore this.…
As many others have noted, “hunger with wings” is just right for hawk.