Wake up your poetry brains with 15 Words or Less (guidelines here)!
I just got a nifty little macro-lens for my iPhone. The other day, I was filling our onion powder spice jar, using a funnel. When I set the funnel down on the stove, tip up, I saw there was this little rim of onion powder, and it looked kind of statically charged. So I grabbed my phone. This is a little blurry–I’m still figuring out the best circumstances to use this little lens under. But…isn’t that cool? This image makes me think of:
1) a snowflake
2) fake eyelashes
3) an eclipse
And here’s my?first draft.
A Sad Day in February
What winter storm
can make you cry?
An onion blizzard
blowing by!
–Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved
I am holed up with Lisa Bullard today working on a Children’s Writer Insider Guide about writing rhyming picture books! Wheee! I will pop in throughout the day to read your poems. If you’d like to try writing your poems in rhyme today, I’d appreciate the extra inspiration. But they still have to be 15 Words or Less. (And it’s totally fine to not write in rhyme, too.)
Now it’s your turn! Have fun and stick to 15 WORDS OR LESS!??(Title doesn’t count toward word count:>)??
64 Responses
Ring of fire
round the eye
onions make even
Sauron
cry
It looks like an eye behind the powder to me.. Very cool picture 🙂
Amelia–Oh, I like this connection (and how you wrote it)!
Yeah, I see that monster eye, too. Love this. Who knew an onion was the “one ring to rule them all”? Hehehehe–thanks for the laugh. Love this.
Ring of fire
round the eye
onions make even
Sauron
cry
It looks like an eye behind the powder to me.. Very cool picture 🙂
Amelia–Oh, I like this connection (and how you wrote it)!
Yeah, I see that monster eye, too. Love this. Who knew an onion was the “one ring to rule them all”? Hehehehe–thanks for the laugh. Love this.
orang
noodles
ice
orang
noodles
Thanks, Jessica (I deleted the two Comments you made with corrections). Some days it IS hard to know what to write:>)
orang
noodles
ice
orang
noodles
Thanks, Jessica (I deleted the two Comments you made with corrections). Some days it IS hard to know what to write:>)
Great riddle poem, Laura. Loved it. So unexpected–an onion blizzard. I can imagine a whole book of these. Maybe with photos of your own. What creativity!
Thanks, Linda–I do love riddles (hence my book, Riddle-ku!).
Great riddle poem, Laura. Loved it. So unexpected–an onion blizzard. I can imagine a whole book of these. Maybe with photos of your own. What creativity!
Thanks, Linda–I do love riddles (hence my book, Riddle-ku!).
Laura,
Congratulations on being contracted for a rhyming picture book guide project! Awesome! Wishing you a great experience!
Well, that would be lovely, but this is a book we’re indie publishing. We have several books for children’s writers that we’ve done ourselves:>)
Laura,
Congratulations on being contracted for a rhyming picture book guide project! Awesome! Wishing you a great experience!
Well, that would be lovely, but this is a book we’re indie publishing. We have several books for children’s writers that we’ve done ourselves:>)
OUR TEAM WON!
She opened her mouth
to let it out,
a joyful, exuberant,
golden shout.
Loved your onion blizzard.
Thanks, Cindyb–love that golden shout!
OUR TEAM WON!
She opened her mouth
to let it out,
a joyful, exuberant,
golden shout.
Loved your onion blizzard.
Thanks, Cindyb–love that golden shout!
The First Cup
Hurried, scurried
filled the cup
poured milk too quickly
a mess I’ll clean up.
I was out of creamer for my coffee this morning and drank it black. Wishful thinking
when I saw your photo. Stay warm everyone.
Aw, sorry about that. I don’t drink coffee, but black would be like hot cocoa with no marshmallows, I think!
The First Cup
Hurried, scurried
filled the cup
poured milk too quickly
a mess I’ll clean up.
I was out of creamer for my coffee this morning and drank it black. Wishful thinking
when I saw your photo. Stay warm everyone.
Aw, sorry about that. I don’t drink coffee, but black would be like hot cocoa with no marshmallows, I think!
My superhero power:
To freeze you
in your tracks
with my icy, glittering
stare.
Yes! They do look like ice crystals, don’t they?
My superhero power:
To freeze you
in your tracks
with my icy, glittering
stare.
Yes! They do look like ice crystals, don’t they?
I want a macro-lens, too! What a picture captured! Love the idea of the tears from the “onion blizzard”.
Here I Go Again
Starburst curiosity leads me
down the rabbit hole again,
looking for answers-
hopeful.
Linda Baie ? All Rights Reserved
LOVE that first line, Linda! Also, did you see my ? back on my adjectives post? How would you like your school, class, city identified when I credit you guys on Rock can be… photos using your words? Thanks!
No, sorry, didn’t see it, Laura. I’ll reply soonest! Thanks!
I want a macro-lens, too! What a picture captured! Love the idea of the tears from the “onion blizzard”.
Here I Go Again
Starburst curiosity leads me
down the rabbit hole again,
looking for answers-
hopeful.
Linda Baie ? All Rights Reserved
LOVE that first line, Linda! Also, did you see my ? back on my adjectives post? How would you like your school, class, city identified when I credit you guys on Rock can be… photos using your words? Thanks!
No, sorry, didn’t see it, Laura. I’ll reply soonest! Thanks!
Onion
I hid under earth
but now I?m dry,
I need sharp-damp?
I?ll make you cry.
?Kate Coombs
“sharp-damp” — fun!
Onion
I hid under earth
but now I?m dry,
I need sharp-damp?
I?ll make you cry.
?Kate Coombs
“sharp-damp” — fun!
I love your creative little poem today, Laura.
You are going to have fun with that camera.
Outer Space
Satellite spinning
out-of-control,
enters the dreaded,
enormous black hole.
So glad you wrote this, Pat. I saw a black hole, too! But not until I had written my post already. Love this little rhyme–it’s tight!
I love your creative little poem today, Laura.
You are going to have fun with that camera.
Outer Space
Satellite spinning
out-of-control,
enters the dreaded,
enormous black hole.
So glad you wrote this, Pat. I saw a black hole, too! But not until I had written my post already. Love this little rhyme–it’s tight!
AN ONION CAN BE…
Garden-dweller,
Bug-repeller,
Kitchen worker,
Tear-jerker.
- Matt Forrest Esenwine
(Good grief, you’ve got ME writing these now…!
This is wonderful! And, careful, they’re addicting!
AN ONION CAN BE…
Garden-dweller,
Bug-repeller,
Kitchen worker,
Tear-jerker.
- Matt Forrest Esenwine
(Good grief, you’ve got ME writing these now…!
This is wonderful! And, careful, they’re addicting!
Powder Power
Powdered sugar
Powdered milk
Powdered cocoa
Powdered onion
Powdered garlic
Take a powder
Don?t sneeze!
Love the playful insertion of “take a powder” there!
Powder Power
Powdered sugar
Powdered milk
Powdered cocoa
Powdered onion
Powdered garlic
Take a powder
Don?t sneeze!
Love the playful insertion of “take a powder” there!
At the Rim
Starry-eyed,
she’s bursting to leap,
to soar with flare–
or plunge too deep.
Oooooohhhh–volcano rim?
At the Rim
Starry-eyed,
she’s bursting to leap,
to soar with flare–
or plunge too deep.
Oooooohhhh–volcano rim?
I really liked your poem today!
Frostbite
The salt-crystallized tears
Round-rimming her eyes
Forever flash-frozen
In betrayed-trust surprise!
Thank you, Karen! Ooh, this is evocative. Great image–I’m seeing a dead woman who died of frostbite/hypothermia. No idea if that’s actually what you meant, but that’s what I get out of it!
I really liked your poem today!
Frostbite
The salt-crystallized tears
Round-rimming her eyes
Forever flash-frozen
In betrayed-trust surprise!
Thank you, Karen! Ooh, this is evocative. Great image–I’m seeing a dead woman who died of frostbite/hypothermia. No idea if that’s actually what you meant, but that’s what I get out of it!
EYELASH MASCARA
Frazzled eyelashes
Are manipulated
To onyx waves
One stroke at a time.
© Charles Waters 2015 all rights reserved.
Onyx waves. Love that. And now I’m picturing people with these huge obsidian eyelashes, too!
EYELASH MASCARA
Frazzled eyelashes
Are manipulated
To onyx waves
One stroke at a time.
© Charles Waters 2015 all rights reserved.
Onyx waves. Love that. And now I’m picturing people with these huge obsidian eyelashes, too!