Man or Machine? [15 words or less]

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?Photo: Laura Salas

Wake up your poetry brains with 15 Words or Less (guidelines here).

Snow is falling hard and fast right now, so maybe by next week, I’ll have a gorgeous snowy image. But for today, it’s a picture from my physical therapy place!

3 things this photo makes me think of:

1) baseball mitt
2) Wooly Willy–remember that magnet/metal shavings face game?
3) the Iron Giant’s hand (I loved that movie)

And here’s my first draft–which makes no sense:

An Unbelievable View

When Machine Man
lifts me high,
I see all the way into
my future

–Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved

Now it’s your turn! Have fun? and stick to? 15 WORDS OR LESS!??(Title doesn’t count toward word count:>)?

140 Responses

  1. People are coming
    The room’s a mess
    No time to tidy
    I must confess

    Too lazy !

    - Anne McKenna

  2. People are coming
    The room’s a mess
    No time to tidy
    I must confess

    Too lazy !

    - Anne McKenna

  3. Your poem does make sense to me, if you see a better more fit you in the future.
    I am reminded of my morning workouts at Curves.

    Curves

    Get ready
    I’m ready
    One, two, three lift
    Change stations now
    Repeat
    Maintain
    Retain
    Again

    –Margaret Simon

    1. We were both taken to the same place, Margaret (easier to write about the workout than to actually workout?) Your short sentences and rhythm remind me of a workout, especially “Repeat/Maintain/Retain/Again.”

    2. Ahh…I was thinking science fiction when I wrote my poem, not really workouts/fitness at all. But if that makes it make sense, I’ll take it:>) I like the set-ness of this, the steadfast, routine feeling. It really matches the topic!

  4. Your poem does make sense to me, if you see a better more fit you in the future.
    I am reminded of my morning workouts at Curves.

    Curves

    Get ready
    I’m ready
    One, two, three lift
    Change stations now
    Repeat
    Maintain
    Retain
    Again

    –Margaret Simon

    1. We were both taken to the same place, Margaret (easier to write about the workout than to actually workout?) Your short sentences and rhythm remind me of a workout, especially “Repeat/Maintain/Retain/Again.”

    2. Ahh…I was thinking science fiction when I wrote my poem, not really workouts/fitness at all. But if that makes it make sense, I’ll take it:>) I like the set-ness of this, the steadfast, routine feeling. It really matches the topic!

  5. Hand
    Lying open
    Awaiting new
    Possibilities

    Cool picture! I love your “see all the way into the future” — Really cool!

    1. Amelia,
      I love how you have seen a hand and how it brings you to think of the future. You have captured a big idea in a few words. There is so much to think about from your poem. I really like it!

  6. Hand
    Lying open
    Awaiting new
    Possibilities

    Cool picture! I love your “see all the way into the future” — Really cool!

    1. Amelia,
      I love how you have seen a hand and how it brings you to think of the future. You have captured a big idea in a few words. There is so much to think about from your poem. I really like it!

  7. Laura, your poem makes perfect sense to me. Now here’s my weird take.

    Winter Olympics

    Qualifying pilings
    await final check-up
    before being driven
    into snow to support
    new ski jump.

    1. I like how you build from the trails to being chosen, success even before the games begin.

      1. Thanks Ellie. I really wanted to drive the pilings into beach sand but in service to the poem I decided to keep it seasonal.

    2. Well, I’m glad it makes sense to someone! What a great, original idea from this pic–I absolutely love that first line. Somehow it’s both a tongue-twister but also a roll-right-off-your-tongue line.

  8. Laura, your poem makes perfect sense to me. Now here’s my weird take.

    Winter Olympics

    Qualifying pilings
    await final check-up
    before being driven
    into snow to support
    new ski jump.

    1. I like how you build from the trails to being chosen, success even before the games begin.

      1. Thanks Ellie. I really wanted to drive the pilings into beach sand but in service to the poem I decided to keep it seasonal.

    2. Well, I’m glad it makes sense to someone! What a great, original idea from this pic–I absolutely love that first line. Somehow it’s both a tongue-twister but also a roll-right-off-your-tongue line.

  9. A Single Leather Glove

    I never learned
    the full story
    of the time he
    spent entrenched
    in France.

    Diane Mayr

    1. Entrenched.…one powerful word. One glove left behind. Words left unsaid. You have opened doors for my thoughts, Diane. Good to see you in Boston!

      1. Great to meet you, too, and to put a face to a name, or in your case, an initial 😉

    2. That verb entrenched makes the whole poem, Diane! btw, it was so good to see you in Boston–can’t remember if I already said that. And I was going to ask you at Joyce’s thing how Kathy and Andi are doing. Sorry you didn’t end up making it there!

  10. A Single Leather Glove

    I never learned
    the full story
    of the time he
    spent entrenched
    in France.

    Diane Mayr

    1. Entrenched.…one powerful word. One glove left behind. Words left unsaid. You have opened doors for my thoughts, Diane. Good to see you in Boston!

      1. Great to meet you, too, and to put a face to a name, or in your case, an initial 😉

    2. That verb entrenched makes the whole poem, Diane! btw, it was so good to see you in Boston–can’t remember if I already said that. And I was going to ask you at Joyce’s thing how Kathy and Andi are doing. Sorry you didn’t end up making it there!

  11. No Pain, No Gain

    Gym routine:
    vigor, vim
    fighting trim.
    Writing life:
    poems spilled
    pages filled.
    Honest truth?
    Accomplishment.

    1. Amazing how much you fit into this poem. Fighting trim — love it. And your last two lines — the quest in three words. Awesome.

  12. No Pain, No Gain

    Gym routine:
    vigor, vim
    fighting trim.
    Writing life:
    poems spilled
    pages filled.
    Honest truth?
    Accomplishment.

    1. Amazing how much you fit into this poem. Fighting trim — love it. And your last two lines — the quest in three words. Awesome.

    1. Ah yes, when running was fun and effortless instead of exercise. Love this contrast.

    2. You remind me of my granddaughter (4), always wanting to race me (she knows she will win!). I like this memory while exercising.

    3. I saw a new gym treadmill, climber, elliptical in one. I am thinking I need to re-do my house and put it in a great spot to use, but I know that won’t work. Must get myself to a gym! Or at least for a walk.
      Love those 5 year olds. They need to run. Have you seen the video of a teacher teaching math to Kindergarteners with our new “system”? It was not pretty. Robotic and wrong. Let them fly!

    1. Ah yes, when running was fun and effortless instead of exercise. Love this contrast.

    2. You remind me of my granddaughter (4), always wanting to race me (she knows she will win!). I like this memory while exercising.

    3. I saw a new gym treadmill, climber, elliptical in one. I am thinking I need to re-do my house and put it in a great spot to use, but I know that won’t work. Must get myself to a gym! Or at least for a walk.
      Love those 5 year olds. They need to run. Have you seen the video of a teacher teaching math to Kindergarteners with our new “system”? It was not pretty. Robotic and wrong. Let them fly!

  13. Hands gripping weights -
    checking the clock,
    later checking the scale,
    the fit of my clothes.

  14. Hands gripping weights -
    checking the clock,
    later checking the scale,
    the fit of my clothes.

  15. Hi Laura, I like your idea of future glory!

    Fitness countdown:
    Waiting ?
    silent and somber,
    wakened only
    by moving muscles,
    and morning resolve.

  16. Hi Laura, I like your idea of future glory!

    Fitness countdown:
    Waiting ?
    silent and somber,
    wakened only
    by moving muscles,
    and morning resolve.

  17. The opposites of the picture immediately drew me in, and the progression of motion and emotion followed.

    white, black
    hard, soft
    up, down
    hard, easy
    easy, hard
    weak, strong
    down, up

  18. The opposites of the picture immediately drew me in, and the progression of motion and emotion followed.

    white, black
    hard, soft
    up, down
    hard, easy
    easy, hard
    weak, strong
    down, up

  19. Bait and Switch

    Open, inviting,
    he sucks you in
    then
    tucks you tight
    in smothering love.

    ~~Barbara Turner

  20. Bait and Switch

    Open, inviting,
    he sucks you in
    then
    tucks you tight
    in smothering love.

    ~~Barbara Turner

  21. Love your poem, Laura and wow about seeing the baseball mitt. That is awesome!

    Step into my licorice fairground
    belt up and be jiggled.
    Try not to eat me.

    1. Oooh, licorice fairground! I love it when a poem makes me feel like I’ve taken some kind of mind-altering drug. It’s a whole other world!

  22. Love your poem, Laura and wow about seeing the baseball mitt. That is awesome!

    Step into my licorice fairground
    belt up and be jiggled.
    Try not to eat me.

    1. Oooh, licorice fairground! I love it when a poem makes me feel like I’ve taken some kind of mind-altering drug. It’s a whole other world!

  23. WORK OUT

    It is time
    to hit the gym
    my trainer’s svelte
    let me look like him.

    I didn’t think I could do it in 15 words…Can I call this a thin little poem?

  24. WORK OUT

    It is time
    to hit the gym
    my trainer’s svelte
    let me look like him.

    I didn’t think I could do it in 15 words…Can I call this a thin little poem?

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