Concert [15 words or less poems]

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Rush Concert
Photo: Randy Salas

 

15WOLs

I went to a Rush concert last week in St. Paul. Wow. I’m only a casual Rush fan (I love their smart lyrics, and I love the challenge of playing drums to Rush songs on Rock Band–holy moly), but it was awesome. Anyway, during one song, Geddy Lee had the entire audience of maybe 15,000 people clapping together, and there were all sorts of colored lights, and the energy was so high that it felt like all of us in the audience became a single animal, and that clap felt like our heartbeat. My chest was reverberating with the bass. So I kind of wrote my 15 Words or Less Poem in that moment and had Randy take a picture later. That’s backward for me. Usually, I take a picture, see what it makes me think of, and then write a poem. Oh, well. Good to shake things up every now and then, right?

This image makes me think of:

1) rhythmic gymnastics with the ribbons (Have you seen boxer Terry Crews’ lip-sync battle to A Thousand Miles, with the rhythmic gymnastics? Hysterical.
2) ice cream sundae
3) alien spaceship

And here’s my?first draft.

The Audience

 

Now it’s your turn! Have fun and stick to 15 WORDS OR LESS!??(Title doesn’t count toward word count:>) If you leave a poem in the comments, and if it’s 15 words or less, I’ll try to respond!

 

146 Responses

  1. Randy’s photo would make a great poster. I feel the unity in your poem. There was an emotional rush too, like the group’s name. Awesome!

    1. I like the reference of an energy rush to the name of the group. Rushing and group frenzy.

  2. Randy’s photo would make a great poster. I feel the unity in your poem. There was an emotional rush too, like the group’s name. Awesome!

    1. I like the reference of an energy rush to the name of the group. Rushing and group frenzy.

    1. Love the way you’ve put unexpected words together–face screaming and that they are screaming along to joy. It all works, but it’s been twisted just a bit so it’s not the way you’d usually phrase it. Makes me as a reader stop to think and savor the words.

    1. Love the way you’ve put unexpected words together–face screaming and that they are screaming along to joy. It all works, but it’s been twisted just a bit so it’s not the way you’d usually phrase it. Makes me as a reader stop to think and savor the words.

  3. Northern Lights

    electric sky waves
    15’000 claps of energy
    blue-violet
    swirling sunshine
    Alaska nights
    15’000 gazing eyes

    Poem By Jessica Bigi

    Laura I like your poem hope you don’t mined I barrowed your 15’000 I love the pic

    1. No problem, Jessica. I love your first line, especially, and that swirling sunshine. Beautiful!

  4. Northern Lights

    electric sky waves
    15’000 claps of energy
    blue-violet
    swirling sunshine
    Alaska nights
    15’000 gazing eyes

    Poem By Jessica Bigi

    Laura I like your poem hope you don’t mined I barrowed your 15’000 I love the pic

    1. No problem, Jessica. I love your first line, especially, and that swirling sunshine. Beautiful!

  5. Title didn’t get on there, so the first line looked like the title.…trying again.

    Rainbow’s Downfall

    {{Thunder Rumbles}}

    rainbow’s arc
    shatters, tumbles
    pooling puddles
    color muddles
    {{Thunder Rumbles}}

    Donna JT Smith, all rights reserved

    1. Oh, this is so fun to read aloud, Donna. I love the violence of this poem with such an ethereal topic!

    2. Great imagery Donna, especially the arcs in a rainbow made straight.

    3. this is wonderful makes me think of and sounds like rainbow marbles rolling down a giant funnel

  6. Title didn’t get on there, so the first line looked like the title.…trying again.

    Rainbow’s Downfall

    {{Thunder Rumbles}}

    rainbow’s arc
    shatters, tumbles
    pooling puddles
    color muddles
    {{Thunder Rumbles}}

    Donna JT Smith, all rights reserved

    1. Oh, this is so fun to read aloud, Donna. I love the violence of this poem with such an ethereal topic!

    2. Great imagery Donna, especially the arcs in a rainbow made straight.

    3. this is wonderful makes me think of and sounds like rainbow marbles rolling down a giant funnel

  7. Acronym in Technicolor

    Red
    Orange
    Yellow

    Green

    Blue
    Indigo
    Violet

    rainbow lightning
    zig-zags, strikes,
    fusing
    drumbeats with heartbeats.

    Laura, what an awesome experience. You are brave! Hubby did a good job for you. The picture immediately brought back a childhood formula for remembering the order of colors in a rainbow.

  8. Acronym in Technicolor

    Red
    Orange
    Yellow

    Green

    Blue
    Indigo
    Violet

    rainbow lightning
    zig-zags, strikes,
    fusing
    drumbeats with heartbeats.

    Laura, what an awesome experience. You are brave! Hubby did a good job for you. The picture immediately brought back a childhood formula for remembering the order of colors in a rainbow.

  9. Laura, I love, love your poem this morning. Your words make me feel that excitement.
    That gave me the idea for my poem about feelings I have at dances.

    Dance Floor

    Crowd moves as one,
    stepping left, stepping right,
    all together.
    What a sight!
    Electric Slide!

    1. I like Pat. There is definitely something electric about the picture.

  10. Laura, I love, love your poem this morning. Your words make me feel that excitement.
    That gave me the idea for my poem about feelings I have at dances.

    Dance Floor

    Crowd moves as one,
    stepping left, stepping right,
    all together.
    What a sight!
    Electric Slide!

    1. I like Pat. There is definitely something electric about the picture.

  11. Although mine is very different, the idea is the same as yours, Laura, “one roar/voice/song/beast”. Love it!

    Concert Collaboration

    The band streams notes
    like stormy weather.
    Rainbows dust the crowd,
    gold found together.
    Linda Baie ?All Rights Reserved

    1. Oh, I love the weather analogy, and the that “dust”! Great word choice and lovely ending…

  12. Although mine is very different, the idea is the same as yours, Laura, “one roar/voice/song/beast”. Love it!

    Concert Collaboration

    The band streams notes
    like stormy weather.
    Rainbows dust the crowd,
    gold found together.
    Linda Baie ?All Rights Reserved

    1. Oh, I love the weather analogy, and the that “dust”! Great word choice and lovely ending…

  13. Modern Music

    Cacophony of light, sound
    Hordes of screamers abound
    Roll over, Beethoven
    Your Ninth?s still around

    1. Hehehe–Beethoven certainly does have lasting power. Rush has been around 40 years, but who knows? Clever poem–thanks for sharing!

  14. Modern Music

    Cacophony of light, sound
    Hordes of screamers abound
    Roll over, Beethoven
    Your Ninth?s still around

    1. Hehehe–Beethoven certainly does have lasting power. Rush has been around 40 years, but who knows? Clever poem–thanks for sharing!

  15. Break a glass.
    Scatter sparkling splinters.

    Break white light.
    Spray rainbow slivers.

    1. Ooh, this is lovely–science and repetition and wonderful word choice all in one tiny package!

    2. not shore way but your poem makes me think of meatier showers very beautiful

  16. Break a glass.
    Scatter sparkling splinters.

    Break white light.
    Spray rainbow slivers.

    1. Ooh, this is lovely–science and repetition and wonderful word choice all in one tiny package!

    2. not shore way but your poem makes me think of meatier showers very beautiful

  17. FIFTEEN SECONDS OF FAME

    “Clean-up aisle seven!”
    I’m star of that show!
    Mom’s unappreciative,
    back home we go.

  18. FIFTEEN SECONDS OF FAME

    “Clean-up aisle seven!”
    I’m star of that show!
    Mom’s unappreciative,
    back home we go.

    1. Buffy–great words! Dancers brandish, flaunt and flounce. Nice sounds. And oh, where do they go? I feel sad they’ve gone.

    2. Buffy, I like the word brandish used in conjunction with softness of colored scarves.

    1. Buffy–great words! Dancers brandish, flaunt and flounce. Nice sounds. And oh, where do they go? I feel sad they’ve gone.

    2. Buffy, I like the word brandish used in conjunction with softness of colored scarves.

    1. Oh, I love this. It makes me see the Chinese Dragon as though it’s in a strobe light, in stop motion.

    1. Oh, I love this. It makes me see the Chinese Dragon as though it’s in a strobe light, in stop motion.

  19. NIGHTTIME DAYDREAM
    Strobe lights shine
    Rainbows rays of glory
    As I begin my air guitar solo.

    © Charles Waters 2015 all rights reserved.

  20. NIGHTTIME DAYDREAM
    Strobe lights shine
    Rainbows rays of glory
    As I begin my air guitar solo.

    © Charles Waters 2015 all rights reserved.

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