Happy Poetry Friday! I am at the ITEM conference today chatting with media specialists and instructional technology folks (and seeing some writer friends, too). Hopefully, we will not be squabbling like the moon and sun are in my poems today! Last month, we Poetry 7 wrote found poems. This month, we tried a form I was unfamiliar with–the etheree. It’s an unrhymed poem with lines of ascending syllable counts from 1-10. Confession time. I was super excited to learn about this form, and I wrote a first draft of a pair of etheree, one regular, and one reverse (counting down from 10 to 1 syllable). And then September blew by.
So…here you have my first draft. Because I love space stuff and am working on picture book revisions about the moon, the moon and sun came to me right away and started griping about each other:>) I’m really happy with them, for a first draft. Oh, I’m lying. I did change something–the line “Stealing my light to glow through the night” started out as “Stealing Sun’s light to glow brightly at night.” But, ahem, that’s 10 syllables. Oops! Plus, I realized that Sun, as a character/narrator, should be saying “my” instead of “Sun’s.” Because the Sun, while irritable, is NOT an annoying character on a reality show talking about herself in third person.
The Sun and Moon Gripe a Little
(a pair of etherees)
I. Moon Says…
“Look at me!
Dance, planets! Spin!”
Live at her mercy.
Center of attention,
brightest star in the sky. Sigh.
Day’s drama queen of dawn and dusk.
So necessary. So exhausting.
Never hides her light under a bushel.
II. Sun Says…
“Ooooh, look at me, so pale and cool and calm.”
Stealing my light to glow through the night.
Thief of the silver stream, wearing
my hand-me-down gleaming gown.
Just a chunk of grey rock.
Rough chalky craters.
No star power.
–Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved
I’ll be linking to the rest of the Poetry 7’s etherees as they go live.
Here are the previous Poetry Sisters collaborations:
|September 2015||Found poems|
|August 2015||Classified haiku|
|July 2015||Inspired by e.e. cummings’ poems|
|Mar 2015||Sestinas (Lord have mercy)|
|Feb 2015||Villanelles on hidden things|
|Jan 2015||Triolets on beginnings (And I posted an extra one here.)|
|Pre-2015||Villanelles, a crown sonnet, rondeau redoubles, and pantoums|
And for more Poetry Friday fun, visit Heidi Mordhorst at My Juicy Little Universe for the Poetry Friday Roundup!