Swirly Jack [15 words or less poems]

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15WOLs

I took this pic while Randy was washing Captain Jack Sparrow, who was just a teensy bit ripe! Maddie usually bathes him, but she’s been away since early September, so… Jack wouldn’t hold still, but I kind of liked this effect. This image makes me think of:

1) “makes my head spin!”
2) The Exorcist
3) a merry-go-round

And here’s my?first draft. I decided to do an acrostic with just one word per line. I don’t do them that way very often!

SMH [Shaking My Head]

Head’s a blur.
Circle of fur.
Ears to chin
take a spin.

?-Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved

 

Now it’s your turn! Have fun and stick to 15 WORDS OR LESS!??(Title doesn’t count toward word count:>)??

 

138 Responses

  1. Pinpoint of time
    Standstill of seconds
    Warping of minutes
    Vortex of dog

    Always love seeing pictures of Jack 🙂

    1. Amelia, I too thought vortex — I will date myself — does anyone remember the silly song/verse about Ida Mae taking a bath and going right down that drain?

  2. Pinpoint of time
    Standstill of seconds
    Warping of minutes
    Vortex of dog

    Always love seeing pictures of Jack 🙂

    1. Amelia, I too thought vortex — I will date myself — does anyone remember the silly song/verse about Ida Mae taking a bath and going right down that drain?

  3. swirling pup
    howling growling
    splicing splashing
    study’s bubbles
    spinning pups
    round and round
    slipping and a sliding
    some one hand pour
    pup a towel

    this is a fun pic today so is your poem today

    poem By
    Jessica Bigi

    1. swirling pup
      howling growling
      splicing splashing
      study’s bubbles
      spinning pups
      round and round
      slipping sliding
      pour pup
      needs a towel

      shortened it some Poem by Jessica Bigi

          1. And I largely enforce that because 99% of the time our poems are SO MUCH BETTER when we force ourselves to keep only the very best, most necessary words:>)

  4. swirling pup
    howling growling
    splicing splashing
    study’s bubbles
    spinning pups
    round and round
    slipping and a sliding
    some one hand pour
    pup a towel

    this is a fun pic today so is your poem today

    poem By
    Jessica Bigi

    1. swirling pup
      howling growling
      splicing splashing
      study’s bubbles
      spinning pups
      round and round
      slipping sliding
      pour pup
      needs a towel

      shortened it some Poem by Jessica Bigi

          1. And I largely enforce that because 99% of the time our poems are SO MUCH BETTER when we force ourselves to keep only the very best, most necessary words:>)

  5. Great picture and a good inspiration for your poem. Love this! I’m sending it to my sisters who both have dogs.

  6. Great picture and a good inspiration for your poem. Love this! I’m sending it to my sisters who both have dogs.

    1. Love this, Donna–I can totally picture the shape–no worries. I like how you’re speaking directly to Toto:>)

    1. Love this, Donna–I can totally picture the shape–no worries. I like how you’re speaking directly to Toto:>)

  7. Your use of words and rhyme is delightful, Laura, as is the picture!

    Captain Jack Sparrow?s Water Trick

    bath joy,
    wind-up boy
    floaty toy
    magically see
    with water he
    grew in size
    delightfully
    Linda Baie ?All Rights Reserved

  8. Your use of words and rhyme is delightful, Laura, as is the picture!

    Captain Jack Sparrow?s Water Trick

    bath joy,
    wind-up boy
    floaty toy
    magically see
    with water he
    grew in size
    delightfully
    Linda Baie ?All Rights Reserved

  9. Captain Jack’s Dream Do

    I want the style
    yet all the while
    my head’s a’whirl.
    Aced that swirl!

    Speaking of snapping a pic at just the right time! Great photography. No offense Laura to man or beast — just had to go with my first impression. The coif is unmistakable.

    1. Hehehe–love that last line, especially:>) And the photo is just what comes of using only a cell phone to take pics. It’s not fast enough to get clear shots. Usually things are just a tiny bit blurry–in this case, it worked FOR me instead of against me:>)

  10. Captain Jack’s Dream Do

    I want the style
    yet all the while
    my head’s a’whirl.
    Aced that swirl!

    Speaking of snapping a pic at just the right time! Great photography. No offense Laura to man or beast — just had to go with my first impression. The coif is unmistakable.

    1. Hehehe–love that last line, especially:>) And the photo is just what comes of using only a cell phone to take pics. It’s not fast enough to get clear shots. Usually things are just a tiny bit blurry–in this case, it worked FOR me instead of against me:>)

  11. Told them no.
    Wouldn’t listen, so..
    get ready, get set-
    here’s what you get:
    spin-cycle!

    no no no
    don’t want to go
    into that tub
    don’t want a scrub-
    blub.…

    1. oops, bottom stanza should have been on top. (Double poems today!) But there was a two year old on my lap and a button got pushed early.

    2. Cute Cindy. Revenge is exactly what we get if we let them have that first shake out of the bath or the rain.

  12. Told them no.
    Wouldn’t listen, so..
    get ready, get set-
    here’s what you get:
    spin-cycle!

    no no no
    don’t want to go
    into that tub
    don’t want a scrub-
    blub.…

    1. oops, bottom stanza should have been on top. (Double poems today!) But there was a two year old on my lap and a button got pushed early.

    2. Cute Cindy. Revenge is exactly what we get if we let them have that first shake out of the bath or the rain.

  13. Wonderful photo, Laura (and poem, too!) My first thought was vortex, too (but didn’t compare to Amelia’s vortex of dog–that’s brilliant!)

    Don’t Throw out the Doggy with the Bathwater

    Fur circles and clogs
    like miniature dogs
    concealing his shame–
    skunk is to blame!

    1. That is so funny! Reminds me of something I read/heard recently about being able to build entire new cats out of the cat hair that was shed on furniture or something. Man, that’s gonna bug me now. Great title:>)

  14. Wonderful photo, Laura (and poem, too!) My first thought was vortex, too (but didn’t compare to Amelia’s vortex of dog–that’s brilliant!)

    Don’t Throw out the Doggy with the Bathwater

    Fur circles and clogs
    like miniature dogs
    concealing his shame–
    skunk is to blame!

    1. That is so funny! Reminds me of something I read/heard recently about being able to build entire new cats out of the cat hair that was shed on furniture or something. Man, that’s gonna bug me now. Great title:>)

    1. Oops?hit send before I finished..

      GASTROPOD ON MY DOG

      On my head
      there’s a snail instead.
      Oh well?
      a shell is swell.

      Ellen Vojnovic

      1. That’s so funny! It does look like a snail. And the word “gastropod” in itself makes me laugh.

    1. Oops?hit send before I finished..

      GASTROPOD ON MY DOG

      On my head
      there’s a snail instead.
      Oh well?
      a shell is swell.

      Ellen Vojnovic

      1. That’s so funny! It does look like a snail. And the word “gastropod” in itself makes me laugh.

  15. Captain, Oh Captain

    Under gale driven spray
    Of frothy seas,
    My porcelain vessel trembles;
    I’m sucked into a whirlpool
    Of unwanted hygiene.
    BAIL!

    1. Wonderful! Those first two lines are so sensory, and then that porcelain vessel–yes!

  16. Captain, Oh Captain

    Under gale driven spray
    Of frothy seas,
    My porcelain vessel trembles;
    I’m sucked into a whirlpool
    Of unwanted hygiene.
    BAIL!

    1. Wonderful! Those first two lines are so sensory, and then that porcelain vessel–yes!

  17. Shake, spin, swirl,
    Shave me instead,
    No more baths!
    Jack sprang and fled!

    This was fun 🙂 It’s been a while since I participated…a long while!

  18. Shake, spin, swirl,
    Shave me instead,
    No more baths!
    Jack sprang and fled!

    This was fun 🙂 It’s been a while since I participated…a long while!

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