Metal Tree [15 Words or Less]

Hello, and welcome! This is 15 Words or Less Poems, a low-pressure way to wake up your poetry brain (guidelines here), and I’m very glad you’re here. 

Photo: Randy Salas

I adore real trees, but I am drawn to sculptures of trees, too, like this metal one on the mall in Washington, DC. That’s me standing beside it, so you get some scale. It’s beautiful!

This image makes me think of several things:

  1. HR Pufnstuf and the Living Island trees
  2. a post-apocalyptic world
  3. couldn’t telephone poles be prettier?

And here’s my first draft. My thoughts went to the weather-warped and bird-and-insect-damaged trees you see sometimes, and how beautiful they still are!

I have missed you guys! I’m happy to be home and working today, and I look forward to your poems!

It’s your turn! Have fun and stick to 15 WORDS OR LESS! (Title doesn’t count toward word count.)

 

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35 Responses

  1. Oh I love your poem, Laura!

    I was captured by the dots…

    Dots and spots
    keen private eyes
    fill the void
    with sneaky spies!

    1. This is clever, Suzanne! Aren’t those dots interesting? Most of the filters I use just do things to colors and line that already exist in an image, but a few, like this one, add something graphically. I love that you spotted the dots and ran with them!

  2. Oh, what a tree! It’s stunning! There’s a lovely rhythm and mood to your poem today, Laura. Here’s mine!

    If trees were made of metal…

    imagine the surprise
    when woodpecker’s
    fast striking beak
    hits intended prize!

    1. Thank you, Molly! I’m hearing the clank and imagining the beak all crumnpled up like in a cartoon:>)

  3. I like your rhymes today, Laura. I went to the online dictionary…

    Metal is material
    with good conductivity.
    A metal tree
    conducts a bird
    symphony.

    1. I think the birds would have to be playing heavy-metal (hehe) music. Love the word play of conducting in its two ways!

  4. Welcome home Laura. Loved your verse, especially the last stanza! The first thing I noticed from the filtered photo was the “light” around you. Laura’s Aura were the first two words that came into my mind; I couldn’t resist.

    Laura’s Aura

    Leafless, lifeless tree,
    tiny me
    aglow,
    sharing warmth
    life springs forth:

    Rebirth!

    1. Aw, thanks, Martha! Yeah, the filter gave me that otherworldly glow. I love your take on it!

  5. Love your poem, Laura! The ending is delightful. That poem needs to be published.

    Landscape Planning

    Strident voices
    argue choices:

    Trees that crumble
    into dust,
    Or metal ones
    that only rust?

    1. I love metal, but hate rust, so I know which what I’m voting for! I love the crumbling into dust part…

  6. Laura, I cant post. It says I’ve already posted and it’s a duplicate, but the original isn’t showing up. I’ve tried fooling it by adding more text and by switching to my computer vs iPad. Won’t go still.

    1. Let’s try this — a reply to my comment!
      I’ve written a few tree poems lately, but no tree sculpture ones, reminds me of the signal towers along the highways they try to camouflage as huge spruce trees. This kind would be better

      All Weather All Purpose

      Owl’s home with
      Aluminum siding,
      Is
      Squirrel’s playground -
      Galvanized sliding
      Is
      Woodpecker’s delightful
      Steel drum tiding!

      By Donna JTSmith

      1. What fun rhymes, Donna, and playful images. Love it! I am on the app, and your comments look fine. I can’t tell whether they’re appearing on the regular site until I get home.…

  7. This is brilliant. What a picture and what a sound. Especially early in the mornings, which woodpeckers seem to love.

  8. poem by Jessica Bigi

    don’t fill hearts
    with concrete-words
    fill hears with wisdom
    growing knowledge trees
    for the world to climb

  9. Something eerie about that tree! And the little glow around you: did you just get there, like a Star Trek character beaming down?

    Metal trees sing:
    high chimes, low thrums,
    touched by wind
    and bird-wing drums.

    —Kate Coombs

    1. Transporter! I love that you start with the metal trees and then move to nature stuff…“bird-wing drums” is lovely!

  10. Laura you’re poem was wonderful especially that last line! I love how there’s a glow around you in the picture, like an aura.

    Heavy Metal

    Petrified?
    Electrified?
    Metal branches Oxidized?
    I’m just glad to be outside!

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