Hi, Poetry Friday peeps!
Last week, I shared my triolet, “Rowing to the Future,” the first in a series of monthly poems I’m writing along with my Poetry 7. This week, I thought I’d share the other triolet I wrote.
Broken Yolk
Each dawn spills from a fractured night.
Sun’s flaming yolk escapes the break
and scrubs the sky in fiery light.
Each dawn spills from a fractured night.
Dark disappears like swifts in flight.
Today’s the world we choose to make
as dawn spills from the fractured night.
Sun’s flaming yolk escapes the break.
–Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved
Here I am reading the poem.
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The Poetry Friday Roundup today is hosted by the versatile Tabatha Yeatts at The Opposite of Indifference. Enjoy!
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Love this, Laura! Between the concept of the ‘broken yolk’ to the conceit of dawn spilling from a fractured night, there’s a lot to like.
Thanks, Matt. I appreciate it!
Love this, Laura! Between the concept of the ‘broken yolk’ to the conceit of dawn spilling from a fractured night, there’s a lot to like.
Thanks, Matt. I appreciate it!
I love this, Laura — the image of the sun as yolk spilling out of the eggshell is very powerful.
Thank you, Sally–I appreciate that:)
I love this, Laura — the image of the sun as yolk spilling out of the eggshell is very powerful.
Thank you, Sally–I appreciate that:)
Such a lovely, poetic way to represent daybreak! And I like the reminder that we have a choice of how to shape and spend each day.
Thanks, Linda!
Such a lovely, poetic way to represent daybreak! And I like the reminder that we have a choice of how to shape and spend each day.
Thanks, Linda!
“Today’s the world we choose to make”
Yes — so perfect.
Thank you for this poem on this cold, blustery, sunless Buffalo morning!!
x, a.
Thanks, Amy–this is a far cry from our MN morning, too:)
“Today’s the world we choose to make”
Yes — so perfect.
Thank you for this poem on this cold, blustery, sunless Buffalo morning!!
x, a.
Thanks, Amy–this is a far cry from our MN morning, too:)
I love sky pictures, sunsets, sunrises, beautiful clouds… This is gorgeous, and the idea of “sun scrubs the sky in a fiery light” is wonderful, Laura.
Thank you, Linda:) I liked the idea of scrubbing the past away…
I love sky pictures, sunsets, sunrises, beautiful clouds… This is gorgeous, and the idea of “sun scrubs the sky in a fiery light” is wonderful, Laura.
Thank you, Linda:) I liked the idea of scrubbing the past away…
Eight lines of WOW! An unbroken yolk is a challenge for me each time I try for one — yours is magic and will never break.
Thanks, Martha! What a nice comment to start my day:)
Eight lines of WOW! An unbroken yolk is a challenge for me each time I try for one — yours is magic and will never break.
Thanks, Martha! What a nice comment to start my day:)
Very beautiful
THanks, Jessica!
Very beautiful
THanks, Jessica!
The triolet is quite a challenge. I’ve written a few, and though a challenge, they are fun! Nature seems to be a good topic for a triolet. I love the flaming yolk of the sun escaping…a great image and good repeating lines.
Thanks, Donna. I love triolets, and agree about nature. The form is so recursive that they often end up as a kind of meditation on a topic, and that usually sends me straight to nature topics:>)
The triolet is quite a challenge. I’ve written a few, and though a challenge, they are fun! Nature seems to be a good topic for a triolet. I love the flaming yolk of the sun escaping…a great image and good repeating lines.
Thanks, Donna. I love triolets, and agree about nature. The form is so recursive that they often end up as a kind of meditation on a topic, and that usually sends me straight to nature topics:>)
The sun’s “flaming yolk” — gorgeous images and gorgeous photo to accompany your poem. Happy New Year, Laura! =)
Thank you, Bridget–you, too!
The sun’s “flaming yolk” — gorgeous images and gorgeous photo to accompany your poem. Happy New Year, Laura! =)
Thank you, Bridget–you, too!
Laura, I love this poem! As everyone else has mentioned, the images are stunning, and the idea that “Today’s the world we choose to make” is such an optimistic one. Here’s to choosing to fill our days with poetry!
Thanks, Catherine. That’s the thought the poem grew from, even though it now perhaps isn’t integrated as smoothly as it could be…
Laura, I love this poem! As everyone else has mentioned, the images are stunning, and the idea that “Today’s the world we choose to make” is such an optimistic one. Here’s to choosing to fill our days with poetry!
Thanks, Catherine. That’s the thought the poem grew from, even though it now perhaps isn’t integrated as smoothly as it could be…
Oh Laura, I am stepping slowing back to poetry and blogging and posting and yours is of course the first stop I made. I am glad I wrote and posted before coming here to read this wonderful poem. I cannot add anything that hasn’t already been said — so much to like about this. You have inspired me to go learn more about this form, which I have never tried.
Aw, thank you, Susan. (This one did go through more revision/thought than most of the unpublished poems I post here.) Oh, do try a triolet! They’re lovely to work on–very meditative!
Oh Laura, I am stepping slowing back to poetry and blogging and posting and yours is of course the first stop I made. I am glad I wrote and posted before coming here to read this wonderful poem. I cannot add anything that hasn’t already been said — so much to like about this. You have inspired me to go learn more about this form, which I have never tried.
Aw, thank you, Susan. (This one did go through more revision/thought than most of the unpublished poems I post here.) Oh, do try a triolet! They’re lovely to work on–very meditative!
Ooh! I think I love this one even more that the one you shared last week!
Thanks, Mary Lee. I kinda do, too. I like the violence of it:)
Ooh! I think I love this one even more that the one you shared last week!
Thanks, Mary Lee. I kinda do, too. I like the violence of it:)
My theme this week for Art Thursday was “morning” & for Poetry Friday I shared a tree poem and it has been so interesting to me to see all the morning and tree-themed posts! I think there must be something about the time of year that has set many of us feeling introspective in a “new dawn” or “steadfast tree” sort of way. You capture a lot of passion and possibility in your triolet!
Thanks, Tabatha–yep, it’s always funny to see what topics kind of gather steam in the general consciousness. I definitely think you’re right about the new year/sunrise and new life kind of theme:)
My theme this week for Art Thursday was “morning” & for Poetry Friday I shared a tree poem and it has been so interesting to me to see all the morning and tree-themed posts! I think there must be something about the time of year that has set many of us feeling introspective in a “new dawn” or “steadfast tree” sort of way. You capture a lot of passion and possibility in your triolet!
Thanks, Tabatha–yep, it’s always funny to see what topics kind of gather steam in the general consciousness. I definitely think you’re right about the new year/sunrise and new life kind of theme:)
So much to love about this poem, Laura, especially this line: Dark disappears like swifts in flight.
Love that beautiful photograph, too.
Thanks, Tara–isn’t that picture glorious? Hooray for Creative Commons!
So much to love about this poem, Laura, especially this line: Dark disappears like swifts in flight.
Love that beautiful photograph, too.
Thanks, Tara–isn’t that picture glorious? Hooray for Creative Commons!
I never heard of a triolet before, Laura, and this is beautiful 🙂
Thank you, Donna. It’s a form I like, even though I don’t write them all that often. I’ve shared a few others, I think–https://laurasalas.com/blog/?s=triolet
I never heard of a triolet before, Laura, and this is beautiful 🙂
Thank you, Donna. It’s a form I like, even though I don’t write them all that often. I’ve shared a few others, I think–https://laurasalas.com/blog/?s=triolet
The hardest part of a triolet is finding that line that is worthy to repeat. Yours work so well to really hone in on the image of a breakfast of the sun.
Aw, thank you, Margaret! I agree, that’s the trick. AND to find a line you can twist so that it’s perhaps more than just straight repetition. That’s the part I’m not so great at! Ah, well. Always working to improve.
The hardest part of a triolet is finding that line that is worthy to repeat. Yours work so well to really hone in on the image of a breakfast of the sun.
Aw, thank you, Margaret! I agree, that’s the trick. AND to find a line you can twist so that it’s perhaps more than just straight repetition. That’s the part I’m not so great at! Ah, well. Always working to improve.
I’m a lover of morning and a collector of morning poems- I’m definitely printing this one out to add to my collection. Such gorgeous metaphors, such a new and intriguing view of sunrise! Thanks for helping me see the world through new eyes! And I’m intrigued by the idea of triolet! Wow, wow, wow!
Thank you, Carol. I am honored!
I’m a lover of morning and a collector of morning poems- I’m definitely printing this one out to add to my collection. Such gorgeous metaphors, such a new and intriguing view of sunrise! Thanks for helping me see the world through new eyes! And I’m intrigued by the idea of triolet! Wow, wow, wow!
Thank you, Carol. I am honored!
This is really lovely. I may have to take a look at the triolet as a form, not as a flower as my mind is trying to turn it into!
Thanks, Diane. This could be a good form for social commentary, so you might like it!
This is really lovely. I may have to take a look at the triolet as a form, not as a flower as my mind is trying to turn it into!
Thanks, Diane. This could be a good form for social commentary, so you might like it!
I love this form. You’ve done a great job with these.
Thanks, I appreciate that. Now, to get started on the villanelle…
I love this form. You’ve done a great job with these.
Thanks, I appreciate that. Now, to get started on the villanelle…
Another wonderful triolet that depicts a colorful dawn beautifully.
Thanks so much, Penny:>)
Another wonderful triolet that depicts a colorful dawn beautifully.
Thanks so much, Penny:>)
I love the orangey-refrain: “Sun?s flaming yolk escapes the break” — it gains layered meaning as it moved through the poem.
Lovely way to start my day today. 🙂
Thanks, Myra. I appreciate that 🙂
I love the orangey-refrain: “Sun?s flaming yolk escapes the break” — it gains layered meaning as it moved through the poem.
Lovely way to start my day today. 🙂
Thanks, Myra. I appreciate that 🙂